Hafiz-recipe?
Khadijah-coursework is to be all in one file, from TA to the end. Your research needs to be in full sentences with your personal reflections. And... U need to look at your research and tell me, how does preservation affect obesity rates? You have to expand on your points and relate them to the question. Your question is how to prevent obesity from rising. Answer all the 5W1H and let me know if u learnt anything.
Sihui- for 'males', not for 'guys'...research needs more depth and you need to explain why you put every piece of information into your report- how it is related to your knowledge of obesity and preventing it. E.g. You list all sorts of methods of cooking but you do not tell me what is the few that you feel are useful for ur question. You should also plan for 2 hours. If it seems that you do not need even an hour including washing, cutting,cooking, decorating and serving... Hmm..
Roy-you get it about personal touch. But your research lacks depth. I see you talk about vege but... What is 'kou gei'? What about phytochemicals apnd
Glen-research lacks personal touch!
Roseanne-ok. My concern is... How is peanut butter better than any other ingredient for runners? What kind of runners? Short-distance or long-distance? What about carbo loading?
Elizabeth- prefer it in Word format! Please email me with a ".doc" file :)
Wan sin- good writing! Really like how you were constantly using "I will" "I feel" "I know that" ! Except for the WOW! Part :) I literally LOL-ed when I read it. Very wrong! Way too personal!
Haiqal- information mash. No direction, no relation to task question, no personal reflection. You need to put everything from TA till recipes into one single file. You are including information without telling me how these things are related to ur target group of people-which, by the way, you have not mentioned anything about... Which could be the reason why you do not have a proper flow in your research. You also did not tell me what are the reasons you do certain dishes. Are you sure scrambled eggs are a good choice? You need to rethink your dishes.
The people mentioned below may have yet to submit their final draft or perhaps they wish to submit it as that. Please check and let me know.
Luqman 2 dishes only?
Ru ying lacks recipes
Ryan dishes are very simple, lacks recipes. confirm last submission?
Janice-i only have a draft of ur research
Aldrich- what dishes?
Zafira- last draft received was april 22. What dishes?
Yan wee- last draft received 25 mar
Carey- what dishes? What I got was a draft, right?
For all who wish to make amendments to your work, please do it and submit it by monday 20 SEPT 2010 9PM, thank you. What I mentioned is simply an opinion, I am not forcing you to change anything, you may choose to leave it as that :)
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